Going On A Diet Essay Samples

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Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health. Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem but others disagree. What is your opinion?

A serious concern nowadays is how our eating habits can affect our health. In particular, it has been demonstrated that eating too much junk food can lead to health issues later in life. One sensible suggestion for dealing with this is to improve the level of health education so that we eat better and live longer. My belief though is that this would not completely solve the problem.

One reason why focussing on health education is an appropriate measure is that it addresses one underlying cause of the problem. It is clear that there is a connection between what people know about nutrition and their eating habits. For example, children who have learned in school about the need to have a varied diet with plenty of vitamins tend to eat more healthily. In contrast, people who have not had this education still eat too much junk food and as a result suffer from diabetes and other diseases.

Better health education, however, is not a complete answer as it ignores the wider social factors that cause people to eat unhealthily. For instance, many people eat fast food because they have a lifestyle that means they do not have time to sit down to a proper meal. Again, other people might eat burgers and pizzas because they are seen to be cool and they want to impress their peers.

There would not appear to be any simple way to deal with these social factors.  A difficulty is that it is very hard for governments to make a difference to the individual choices people make. It might help, however, to ban advertisements for unhealthy foods on television and to require companies to provide proper meal facilities for their employees.

My conclusion is that the government certainly ought to introduce measures to improve the level of health education. However, this probably would not be a  perfect solution as it would also be necessary to deal with the other social factors that cause unhealthy eating.

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The question

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Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health. Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem but others disagree. What is your opinion?

This is a proposal type question where we are asked to give our opinion about whether  improving health education would have a positive effect on people eating too much junk food. We need to be sure that we adopt a clear position on this issue. The mistake would be simply to write about junk food and poor diet.

Different approaches to organising the essay

There are three different approaches possible in this type of question. Broadly speaking it is possible to:

  1. agree that it is the best answer
  2. disagree that it would be effective
  3. accept it but say it would only have a limited effect

If you think that you may run short of ideas, it is typically easier to take approach 2 or 3 as this gives you the opportunity to write a for/against style essay where discuss why it might not work and then suggest another alternative. If you decide to agree with the proposal, it is typically harder to organise your main body paragraphs.

Ideas and essay structure

In this essay I am going to take approach 3 above and organise my essay in this way. You should note that i am going to focus on giving reasons and examples to support my points which will help my coherence band score (learn how to pee and become coherent):

topic paragraph 1

health education is important → it addresses a serious cause of unhealthy eating → explain how health education would help →use an example

topic paragraph 2

health education is not enough → there are other social factors that education would not solve → give examples and explain what those factors are

topic paragraph 3

suggest alternative solutions to health education → discuss why they work or may not work

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Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruins one’s health completely. What is your opinion?

Almost of the women today want a beautiful figure. That is why we are able to find a diet programme almost everywhere in the country. Most of the women have and gone on a diet before either to or just health problem.

A proper diet programme will help you not only to slim down but also to have a eating habits. For instance more vegetables and fruits meat, fried food and carbonated drinks. For a diet programme we shouldn’t food and water. There are some diet programmes from the doctors that help you to have a heart like the “Three day diet” which we can find on the Internet. This programme allows you to eat fruits and also some meat. This way of dieting will help you to avoid some of the health problems in the future like or a heart attack.

However some people do not only go on a diet but they avoid eating and hungry for the whole day. All they have is just either water or juices. Also there people who buy special diet programmes over the counter which are not approved by the health department and they are doing so without consulting a doctor first. They do not follow the basic rules of dieting and this will lead them to some serious health problems like of some body parts or, even worse, death.

In my opinion there is wrong with going on a diet as long as we follow the correct way of eating and .

This essay needs some work. It covers the task and has a good structure. The paragraphs are logically connected and many of sentences are structured correctly. However, there are some sentences with poor structure and many grammatical errors (See comments underlined in blue). Overall, this looks like a band 6.5 essay.

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